Electric Blue & Catnip by Suilan Lee (40% in)

Electric Blue & Catnip - Suilan Lee

The book is free, so I should not be complaining about editing, but it's in my face on almost every single page, and I don't mean just typos: there is a nice juicy collection of misplaced modifiers. Punctuation is in the gutter, too.

 

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Lily is a controlling bitch harpie and a busy body.
Alexi so far comes off as a whiny stalker. He is absent for months, yet he demands commitment from Adrian *eye roll*"

 

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I don't get this credit card problem. You lose the card, you call their CS, you report it stolen, you close the account. Takes 15 minutes.


Why is the account still open 2 days after Alexi lost it? Why can't the "private" accountant call Alexi and straighten things right away? Why Alexi's mother and her possy need a lawyer for this before they even know what kind of damage was done? Why doesn't a busy body like Lily know what was spent two. days. in? I thought she was smart and had her nose and claws in everywhere.  

 

And what's with Josh's kiss out of the blue? Creep

 

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"Two days off," Joshua filed the tit bit away."
Funniest typo, especially in an m/m book :D

This book needs a beta. Desperately so.

 

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Names.

We have: Alexi, Andy and Adrian, talking to each other in the same room @.@
Josh and George are not spelled the same, but they do both start with "Jo" when said out loud.
Then we have a Sherry with her son Shane and her husband Sam.

Stir your soup a little, Mrs. Lee :/

Mammarella

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